Finally got some feedback on the first draft of the pilot script. Main criticism was that the ending isn't strong enough, or funny enough.
Endings are hard.
It all has to change anyway, because I've decided that a character who was going to be a kind of guest should now be a main character who will appear in the rest of the series. And even though it's extremely unlikely that a series will ever happen, the character needs a better introduction if she's going to stick around.
I have a comedian in mind to play the part, so I'm waiting on a response from her before I rewrite the episode. It's always easier to write with a specific voice in mind.