I got feedback on the script today from the Famous Comedian for whom I've written the main role. Generally positive, though he did point out a breath-takingly obvious similarity between my story and a much-loved and highly successful radio series from years and years ago. So breath-takingly obvious that I should really have noticed while I was writing it -- but I got so carried away by the cleverness of my plotting that it passed me by.
He's also advised me to remove much of the torture and beheading that happens in the current script, reasoning that a Radio 4 comedy audience may be turned off by such content. And again, I can't argue with that.
So, the second draft will be very different from the first. This time I may actually work out the story before I fill up thirty pages with words.
Oh, and I did write something for Grey Bloke to say today, as well. Haven't totally forgotten him.